[IELTS Writing] 모범답안 암기2

[Questions]

 

Once chlderen start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social develpoment than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this point?

 

[Answer]

 

(paraphrasing) Some people believe that school teachers have more influence than parents when it comes to intellectual and social development of chiledren. (결론)  Although I think that teachers play a crucial role in a child's development, I disagree that their contruibution is a influential or significant as that of child's parents.

 

(단면) Teachers contribute to the development of children in many important ways. Teachers are tasked with educating children in areas such as mathematics and language, but their impact is not limited to intellectual development only. A good teacher will also instil positive values and habits in their students, (사례) such as strong work ehtic and the importance of both teamwork and using one's own initiative to complete tasks. (경험) For example, my teacher always emphasised how important it is to work together with classmates on group projects, and I still use what I learned from her to communicate well with others to this day.

 

(반론) With that said(그렇지만), I think that parents have an even greater impact on development of childeren. They teach them how to do countless invaluable things in everyday life, (사례) such as crossing the road safely, eating helthily, maintaing good personal hygiene and being polite and well-manneered at all times. (경험) In my own experience, I feel that my parents brought me up exceptionally well, and the values they instilled in me at home have helped me to succeed both in my social and academic lives. I will aways be grateful to my parents for teaching me the true value of working ahrd and achieving my goals.

 

(결론) In the end, teachers and parents both plays a significant role in the development of children. However, I feel that parents have more of impact on their development becuase they teach their children a vast number of invaluable life lessons.